How We Write – Perils of the Princess
Orion wrote this little story for the prompt: The boy beside the mailbox. When Kyros first read the story, he made a face, saying he needed a shot of insulin to counteract the sweetness overload!
It was an okay story, as written, but the editing made it much more fun and not quite so sweet. It’s sort of an extended joke. Kyros felt that the story gave away the ending way too soon, so he suggested some edits that helped conceal the surprise until the very end.
We hope you enjoy our little modern-day fairy tale.
Photo by Ricky Kulmann
PERILS OF THE PRINCESS
The boy beside the mailbox waved his arms at the fire truck. The first fireman out of the cab ran to him, kneeling to the boy’s level.
“You all right?”
“Yes, sir. You gotta hurry! Our dopey old doorman is trapped in daddy’s office by the front door.” He sniffed and wiped a tear from his soot-covered face. “And you gotta save my sweet princess!”
The fireman turned quickly to the other firemen. “There’s a man inside. Doc, Hap, find him!”
Turning back to the boy, he asked, “Is there anyone else in there?”
“No, just the three of us.”
“Good boy. Now tell me where to find your princess.” (more…)